2020年9月大学英语四、六级作文试题评析(一)
贾从永
四级
Directions：
For this part.you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay on online dictionaries.You can start your essay with the sentence“Online dictionaries are becoming increasingly popular”.You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.
本次大學英语四级考试的三道作文试题都属于分析现象型。此类型题目的特点是提出一个社会现象，请考生进行分析。比如本题请考生分析的社会现象是在线词典越来越受欢迎。
我们可以把这篇作文写成三个段落。第一段提出所要分析的现象——在线词典越来越受欢迎。第二段对这种现象进行分析，我们一般从分析原因的角度展开，即分析为什么在线词典越来越受欢迎。这种写法的优点是层次分明、条理清晰。当然，分析原因没有统一的标准答案，只要能自圆其说就行。我们不妨从以下三个方面分析在线词典越来越受欢迎的原因。第一，在线词典使用方便。你不必翻页，只需点击一下鼠标便可查到词义。第二，在线词典更新快，可以查到最新的词义。此外，在线词典大多免费，而纸质词典却往往价格不菲。无怪乎越来越多手头紧的大学生转而钟情于在线词典。
这篇作文可以用预测法结尾。第三段先指出尽管在线词典受欢迎，但不大可能完全取代纸质词典。纸质词典仍会使用很长一段时间才会过时。下面请看参考范文：
Online dictionaries are becoming increasingly popular among college students.According to a recent survey in Shanghai，84.2 percent of those polled on campus said they prefer an to a paper online dictionary paper one when they need to look up a word.
A combination of factors may be responsible for the increasing popularity of online dictionaries. First and foremost is efficiency：
you dont have to flip through the pages， for the meaning of a word is only a click away. Online dictionaries also have the advantage of being constantly updated. You can find the meaning of some buzzwords even popping up last month. Besides， online dictionaries are mostly free of charge， while a print dictionary usually carries a hefty price tag.No surprise growing numbers of cash-strapped college students have switched from physical dictionaries to online ones.
Despite the popularity， it seems unlikely that online dictionaries can replace their physical counterparts altogether. Traditional dictionaries will still be in use for a long time before becoming a thing of the past. （169 words）
语言亮点借鉴：
1.A combination of factors may be responsible for the increasing popularity of online dictionaries.也许是多种因素造成了在线词典越来越受欢迎。本句是第二段的主题句，置于段首以收醒目之效。
2.First and foremost is efficiency：you dont have to flip through the pages， for the meaning of a word is only a click away.首先是效率高。你无须翻页，因为只需点击鼠标便可查到一个单词的意思。first and foremost首先。
3.Besides，online dictionaries are mostly free of charge，while a print dictionary usually carries a hefty price tag.此外，在线词典大多免费，而纸质词典通常价格不菲。carry a hefty/high price tag价格不菲。
4.No surprise growing numbers of cash-strapped college students have switched from physical dictionaries to online ones.越来越多手头拮据的大学生从纸质词典转向了在线词典，这就不足为奇了。No surprise（that）不足为奇。
5.cash-strapped手头紧的。
六级
Directions：
For this part.you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay on the saying“Beauty of the soul is the essential beauty.”You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.
2020年9月大學英语六级考试的三道作文试题都属于阐释道理型。这类作文的题目一般是一句谚语、俗语或者名言，传达一种人生感悟或处世之道。比如，本题要求考生阐述对美的一种看法：心灵美才是美的本质。
这篇作文可以写成三个段落。第一段先把题目中的谚语、俗语或名言引出来，并用通俗的语言对它加以解释，此为立论。第二段论述这句谚语、俗语或名言的正确性。我们要论述一个抽象的道理，最容易下笔的方法是举例论证。为了增强说服力，我们最好能举出名人或伟人的事例。比如，本文不妨以英国著名女影星奥黛丽·赫本为例。奥黛丽·赫本曾主演《罗马假日》《蒂凡尼的早餐》等多部经典电影。她以天生丽质而著称，但更为世人所称道的是她的心灵美。她曾担任联合国儿童基金会的亲善大使，亲赴不少饱受饥荒和战乱的国家和地区，为贫困儿童呐喊、呼吁和募捐。正是因为她的这些善举，她被人们当成美的典范。这样通过奥黛丽·赫本的例子，我们就证明了虽然外在美很重要，但心灵美才是根本的美。当然，我们在论述中也不必为了强调心灵美而否认外在美。事实上，心灵美与外在美是相辅相成、并行不悖的。
本文可以用建议法结尾，即第三段先重述本文的主题，指出外表美固然重要，但心灵美乃是美的根本，然后号召读者更加重视心灵美。下面请看参考范文：
When it comes to true beauty， there is an old saying which goes “Beauty of the soul is the essential beauty.” It means that though outer beauty is admirable，a person with a beautiful soul is truly beautiful.
Audry Hepburn is a perfect example. One of the greatest screen legends， she is known for her astonishing physical beauty. But she is most remembered for her beauty of the soul. After retiring from cinema， she dedicated herself to charity work in developing countries. She traveled the world raising funds to help the needy by clothing them and providing them with food. She impressed us with her sense of responsibility to relieve the suffering of starving children. Outer beauty captures the eyes， but inner beauty captures the heart. Her dedication to the wellbeing of children of third world countries made her the epitome of beauty.
Nice outer appearance is a good thing， but inner beauty is what truly shines.Lets attach more importance to the purity of our soul， for， essentially， beauty lies in the beauty of the soul. （179 words）
语言亮点借鉴：
1.When it comes to true beauty，there is an old saying which goes“Beauty of the soul is the essential beauty.”谈到真正的美，有一句老话说，“心灵美才是本质的美”。
2.Audry Hepburn is a perfect example.奥黛丽·赫本就是一个极好的例子。
3.One of the great screen legends.she is known for her astonishing physical beauty.作为银幕上的一个大传奇人物，她以令人惊叹的美貌而著称。one of the greatest screen legends是主语she的同位语，置于主语之前是为了保持句子的平衡。
4.Outer beauty captures the eyes，but inner beauty captures the heart.外在的美引人注目，内在的美俘获人心。
5.Her dedication to the well-being of children of third world countries made her the epitome of beauty.她致力于第三世界国家儿童的福祉，这使她成为美的典范。
6.Nice outer appearance is a good thing，but inner beauty is what truly shines.外表漂亮是件好事，但内在的美才真正让人光彩夺目。
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